I just
want to get this over with.
It is
8am on the first day of the Spanish Show Jumping Nationals. I am sitting on the
empty white bleachers facing the frightening four foot five jumps. I have
worked all year to win this Championship. I am nervous, so nervous I can’t eat breakfast. I feel like I
have a big bug in my stomach consuming all of my energy. It’s been this way for the past
five years. I am so scared that I won’t
do well, and that I will drop a pole and doom my chances. By the time I went
through the third jump I proved myself right.
Let’s rewind. This was 2014. This
is how I used to think.
It is
8am on the first day of the Spanish Show Jumping Nationals— 2015. I am seating on the
white bleachers, relaxed. Because this year like every other year I have put
hours on end into my passion, riding. Unlike any other year I have trained my
mind simultaneously. I am not scared of failing, because I know that regardless
of the outcome, my world goes beyond this event and this event does not define
who I am.
As the
audience silences to watch the first rider compete, I hear yelling behind me. I
turn back to see a young girl, maybe thirteen, with a pure fear in her eyes.
This bubble in which I find myself, pops. The ability of viewing the world in
the context I have acquired through my experiences as a global citizen sinks
in.
The
eyes, the nose, and even the hair of the children I had the chance to play with
in the many different places I’ve
been fortunate enough to travel to are different from mine. Due to my family’s circumstances I discovered
what the world has to offer from a very young age. Looking at diversity with
wide open eyes has taught me tolerance, to love change and to embrace
uniqueness. However, my journey towards adulthood
happened a little more than two years ago when we moved to Singapore. In this
country, as picture perfect as it seems, I have learned to accept the imperfections
within me and around me; to live alongside those who think and act differently.
Through community service projects, I have been able to feel the love from
those who never received it; and to see the smiles of those who were once
scared to show their faces. My constant search for challenge has helped me
grow, persevere and keep an open mind. I learned how to put situations into
perspective and give them no more than the importance they deserve.
Now it
is my turn.
Elinck
and I are ready; we enter the arena, I take three deep breaths, and with full
consciousness I canter to my first jump. We clear it. From that point on I know
that if we were able to go through one we can go through the next eleven. We
keep cantering at a constant pace waiting for the next jump to come to us. We
get over each one. We are connected, competing in unity, for a common goal: to
excel. Every stride, every jump, and every breath in the arena is conscious
one, from beginning to end. I cherished this course, I confronted it with a
relaxed mind and putting all the knowledge I have acquired this past year into
action.
This
minute and twenty six seconds seemed like a lifetime, yet I didn’t drop a pole.
There are so many ways to experience the obstacles
that we encounter during our lives; it is a matter of choosing which way makes
you happier. I decide to see my life through a positive and open lens. I
decide to live my life with consciousness and exhilarating passion.
This essay was submitted to highly selective universities.
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I want to thank Maria for letting me post her essay here. I also
want to thank her for letting me post photos of her competing. As the last
photo attests she is an exceptionally talented rider. She has devoted unending
hours to her passion and it shows.
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