Some students have a background,
identity, interest, or talent that is so meaningful they believe their
application would be incomplete without it. If this sounds like you, then
please share your story.
A million fist sized
globes of color float in a symmetric grid that surrounds me. My eyes helplessly
follow the silvery lines linking one globe to the next, and just watching it
all makes me feel like I am flying through Superman's Fortress of Solitude, over
the same otherworldly void--only tinted blue and red. In front of me at the Smithsonian
National Museum of Natural History is the giant ionic structure of NaCl, the
very molecule we put on our popcorn, only magnified 42 million billion times
larger, and about 42 million billion times more fascinating. It is strange yet
welcoming to find something so theoretically familiar in such a foreign place,
as if I've found a frame of my own memory projected for all to see.
My brain shifts into
camera mode. I'm the director, cinematographer, and the actor. I imagine how
I'd film myself. As the camera pans right and starts to dolly out, my
silhouette enters the frame, dark against the dazzling chemical background. The
camera stops panning when I am aligned along the right vertical third of the
frame. I face away from the camera, absorbed inside my holographic world of
salt, appreciating how art can be so scientific, and how science can be so
beautiful. Equipped with the language of chemistry, I greedily discover the
textures and colors that matched the chemical formulas I'd met on paper. From
meeting the uranium of my half-life calculations, to discovering the platinum
that catalyzes the reforming of hydrocarbons, I felt on top of the world; for
me, it was the science, not the glamour, that gave meaning to the gems and
minerals in the gallery. I did not care how much the emerald cost, what Greek
myths surrounded the amethyst, or who stole the Hope Diamond, nearly as much as
what molecular composition each stone had, what conditions gave the shine to a
gem, and what impurities gave the crystals their colors.
The world is a feast
for the senses, but I yearn for an understanding that reaches beyond the naked
eye, to experience beyond the colors of a butterfly or the touch of a tarantula
into the molecular realm of chemistry. I know that learning more will help me
achieve an understanding that will only strengthen my wonder at the world
around me. Soon after I found my salty scientific haven, I started inviting
guests to visit. Some may think that scientists live in fortresses of solitude,
but my favorite part of science is sharing my research with others. After all,
knowledge that stays in the head is a wasted opportunity for innovation. I
believe that one half of science is beauty and art that anyone can admire. From
the beautiful symmetry within a simple grain of salt, to the mesmerizing models
of hybridization, or the tetrahedral geometry of the carbon atoms that
distinguish a diamond, the art of science inspires me to inspire others.
I can't wait to delve
deeper into the molecular realm of matter, where I know I'll find magnificent
shapes and patterns inconceivable to even the most creative mind, and the
satisfaction of being able to explain a tiny part of our unbelievably vast
universe. Science expands my interpretation of life to a spectrum that stretches
from vast to tiny; I have to only pan out and see the bigger picture, or zoom
in for a look at the very molecules that create our infinitely complex world.
To satisfy my artistic craving, and fuel a scientific imagination wilder than
pure fiction, I attended Interlochen Summer Arts Camp, and took my first
classes in screenwriting, film production, and acting. With art, I craft an
outlet for universal communication of my passion for the stories of science and
beyond. I love telling stories that bewilder, and for me, the science of how we
came to be tells the most incredible story of all.
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The above essay was submitted to highly selective colleges and universities in response to the Common Application prompt.
Questions
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describe the tone of this essay? How would describe this student’s voice? What is the writing style?
Does this student
follow the advice to show instead of tell? Support your answer?
Does this student demonstrate curiosity? If so how important should this be in an admission decision?
Many schools talk
about the need for applicants to demonstrate passion in their applications.
Does this student succeed in doing this?
Does this essay
support the belief that this student would make a good scientist?
What are the best
ways a student can demonstrate scientific ability on the Common Application?
Is this student
artistic and creative? Support your answer.
Does this essay successfully create a short movie for readers to "see"?
Is this student
smart? If so, how do you know?
If you had to
describe this student based on this essay what would you say --male/female, race
or ethnicity, geographical origin, economic background? Should any/all of these
factors be a part of how an admission officer evaluates an essay? Why or why
not?
Would you like this
person as a roommate?
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