The following four essays were submitted in response to the University of California's Personal Insight prompts.
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1.Describe the most significant challenge you have faced and the steps you
have taken to overcome this challenge. How has this challenge affected your
academic achievement?
Even though
I had been through bone fractures, imperfect grades, this time was way more
different.
"The
students of the first row please answer the questions on the blackboard."
I
tentatively stood up.
A
suffocating silence.
"Her
eyesight is not good, Mr. Huang." Somebody rescued me from my
embarrassment.
That was the
fall of 2014, when I was diagnosed as Asthenopia and Xeroma. The symptoms
include eye dryness, pain, and fear of light. I was not able to read or write
in normal light. Straight lines were all twisted; words became illegible dots.
However,
starting from that fall, I had to wear special glasses everyday. For almost one
year, hospital consultations replaced club activities. My heart became so
fragile that any mention of my illness would trigger floods of tears. Mrs. Li,
our dean, called my mom to convince her to let me drop out to be homeschooled.
How could it possible? I insisted on staying in school. I knew what dropping
out meant: no learning, no identity, no future.
After my
physical recovery, I had to face my terrible test scores. Compared to sitting
at the desk incessantly working on academics, convincing myself to take a leap
of faith again, was far more strenuous. However, when I persuaded myself to
start the journey, I committed wholeheartedly to every chapter and article.
Ultimately, exceeding sprinting hares I became a tortoise who won the academic
race.
Paradoxically,
the illness opened up a new perspective. I learnt to be rational despite the
surrounding stress. Life isn't always going to turn out as expected, no one is
able to control fate. Yet I still took steps to secure my future. Initially, I
knew my learned skills were not qualified sufficient, but I was determined that
I would be capable of achieving my academic goals one day in the future, I just
didn't know when.
Putting more faith in myself than before is
how I pulled through my highly intense course schedule, squeezing in time for
my beloved medical activities, and ending up spending countless hours
researching neurons and finding my life passion.
2.Think
about an academic subject that inspires you. Describe how you have furthered
this interest inside and/or outside of the classroom.
Strongylocentrotus
Droebanchiasis. For some, long biological terms represent boring memorization,
voluminous terminologies, and considerable amounts of time. However, I love
this Gordian Knot.
Biology awes
me with its intricate grandeur. From watching the old BBC documentaries South
Pacific to the recent Planet Earth II, I continuously, even repetitively,
observe nature, but too often only in front of screens. Nature also teaches me
philosophy: All rivers run into the tolerant sea, and firm cliffs stand still
despite storms.
My love for
biology took root in the Marine Biology Course I took at Exeter Summer School.
Waking up at 5:30 a.m. to observe tide rise on Hampton beach, I collected blue
mussels and algae; I saw a Humpback whale 3 meters away; and those long hours I
spent in the library and lab learning the principles of tide and attributes of
organisms encouraged me to help decipher the code of life.
I took a
step further and learned more. A College-level Microbiology course at Duke
summer school was challenging, but I enjoyed exploring the fields of Virology,
Immunology, and CRSPR.
My own
research on how ethanol affects certain microorganisms' fat metabolism
culminated in insufficient data because of contamination of most of the culture
plates. Then I started my second project about neuron cells and sugar. This
time I paid more attention to details about the procedures in order not to make
the same mistakes. I elongated my preparation time and went through each step
several times. Fortunately, the neuron cells were not contaminated, but the
result did not turn out as well as expected because of time constraints.
Thus far, I
am not a successful researcher. Nonetheless, I know that biology research
requires patience and fortitude. Failures will not impede me. True researchers
maintain our passion for biology, the curiosity to understand the language of
nature.
I am looking forward to helping discover
the unknown in biology and in so doing positively affecting the lives of all
those around me.
3.What have
you done to make your school or your community a better place?
"The
wind rises; freshness spreads..."
Contributing
to the community extends beyond community service or volunteer work. It is,
indeed, quite simple-- try to accept everyone in your community, just like how
winds spread clean air.
"Be
tolerant." In China, students who do not focus on study are often
ostracized. One boy was left out by others because he sleeps in class and gets
Cs. However, I greeted him every day with smiles and tried to discuss and plan
group projects with him.
Another
student, Xiangyi, was disdained by all of my team members for his terrible
academic performance. They thought he would drag our team's overall score down.
They tried to convince me, the team leader, to expel him from the team.
Nevertheless, I consoled them saying how his running ability could contribute
to the team. I secretly talked with Xiangyi about his academic problems while
also encouraging him to work hard on the upcoming school sports festival.
Ultimately, he won the first place in the 400 meters, which added 20 points to
our team results! Other team members accepted him at last. While he will never
be a star student, he still became our star sports member and found his place
among his classmates.
Everyone has
his/her own "sparkling point". Qian once committed plagiarism but he
was a great basketball player. Chunxu played with computers instead of
studying, but he was a talented coding student. Zixi was a terrible Physics
learner, but the poems she wrote were fabulous... Not only those who get
highest marks deserve flowers and applause. I try to give them a hand, if
needed, whether it is to answer a complex math question or lend them my bicycle
or to cover the cleaning shift at school. I greet them with smiles, show
admiration for their talents, and ask them for advice. I listen to their words
and value their own stories.
Looking back, I realized that might be why
I won 48 votes out of 53 in the election for class monitor, and how I have,
ever since, tried to unite the whole class.
4.Beyond
what has already been shared in your application, what do you believe makes you
stand out as a strong candidate for admissions to the University of California?
Born in a
completely science-oriented family, I am the trailblazer in the area of liberal
arts. Most my family bookshelves were filled with bulky physics and math
textbooks under dark colors and thick spines. When I was young, I too often
thought my intellectual focus might be restricted to science and math under the
influence of my parents.
Unsurprisingly,
the first time I began to study history, I was overwhelmed by the overflowing
facts: Treaty of Shimonoseki, 92 Consensus, Start of first Opium War. Unlike
math, there isn't a versatile equation that could solve similar questions.
Events from divergent time periods and human geographies were like pieces of
jigsaw puzzle, pieces that I had no idea, yet, how I could join them together.
Initially, I
read history books over and over, trying to familiarize with ideas and catching
new thoughts that flashed in my mind-Boring.
After doing
it for a week, I came up with an idea of drawing timelines-Not bad. (They
resemble documentaries.)
Ultimately,
I analyzed each event's political, economical and social influence-Great! (I'm
now totally obsessed with this kind of thinking!)
I unravel
the veil of other areas than just history. It wasn't until I finished my first
realistic painting that I found out how vividly I could depict the world around
me. However, the first sketch I made took me a whole afternoon sitting at the
bench in front of an oak tree.
First, I
simply observed the tree-Terrible! (Too many details, where to start?)
Second, I
tentatively tried my first drawing from the bottom of the tree bark-Not Bad.
(Some parts look good even though painted randomly.)
Third, I
focused on portions of the tree and then analyzed it holistically, adding
shades and details-Amazing! (I couldn't believe the tree I drew looked so
real!)
I immerse myself in each new endeavor. Then
I naturally find the interest inside it and relish the joy of accomplishments
and the learning from failures. Permitting myself to discover, the passion I
nurture allows me to ultimately excel in areas that I will continue to explore.
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Questions
Rate the essays individually and as a group
1-5, with 5 being the highest score. What ratings did you give these essays and
why?
What three words would you use to describe
this student?
Should students who have overcome
significant challenges be given an advantage in the admission process? Why or
why not?
Has this student overcome significant challenges?
Which of the following do you define as significant challenges?
Physical/mental issues
Family issues
Issues related to race or ethnicity
Issues related to gender
Issues related to class
Issues related to country of origin or citizenship
Other
Should some of these challenges be
categorized more “significant” to colleges and universities than others when
trying to enroll a talented and diverse group of students? If so, which ones?
Have you overcome significant challenges?
Should you make sure to write about them in your application?
Does this student undermine stereotypes
about Asian students and in particular students from China? Why or why not?
Would she add diversity to her college
campus?
Is she smart? If yes, what makes you think
so?
Is she a leader? If yes what makes you
think so?
Does she Does she demonstrate a love of
learning? If she does how important should these character trait be in the selection
process?
Would you want this student as a roommate? Why
or why not?
I would like to thank Barbara for letting me post her essays. She will be starting her first year at UCLA this Fall.
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The University of California system has its
own application and its own way of asking students to write about themselves.
They make it clear on their website that they do not require “essays” from
students. Instead, they require students to answer 4 of 8 possible “personal insight”
questions. Each of these insights must be limited to no more than 350 words.
Here are the choices from the 2017-2018
application:
1. Describe an example of your leadership experience in which you have positively influenced others, helped resolve disputes or contributed to group efforts over time.
2. Every person
has a creative side, and it can be expressed in many ways: problem solving,
original and innovative thinking, and artistically, to name a few. Describe how
you express your creative side.
3. What would you
say is your greatest talent or skill? How have you developed and demonstrated
that talent over time?
4. Describe how
you have taken advantage of a significant educational opportunity or worked to
overcome an educational barrier you have faced.
5. Describe the
most significant challenge you have faced and the steps you have taken to
overcome this challenge. How has this challenge affected your academic
achievement?
6. Think about an
academic subject that inspires you. Describe how you have furthered this
interest inside and/or outside of the classroom.
7. What have you
done to make your school or your community a better place?
8. Beyond what
has already been shared in your application, what do you believe makes you
stand out as a strong candidate for admissions to the University of California?
U Cal provides a lot of text about how to answer these prompts. In a subsequent blog entry I will examine the way UC guides students about the most effective way to respond to these prompts.
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